its a good story for your age (no offence), just a tad predictable. But, you start to think of things to write in plot lines that no-one wouldve thought about when you get to 15/16 yrs i find; upto then i found i was quite restriced in my ideas. For example, my friend writes at an amazing standard now; he writes novels that are actually readable and of things you would never of dreamed of; but he used to be just as restricted mentally as i was. Its still a cool story
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