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Originally posted by CookieRevised
PS: I already removed "Live" in that paragraph. At that time it was still MP!, not MP!L.
Ah thanks Cookie
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Originally posted by CookieRevised
The underlined part seems wrong. I'm not saying it is wrong grammar, just that it seems wrong. Especially "for the threat detected".
Yeah i know what you mean, i spent awhile trying to think of something better to write there... but i guess all my positive christmas energy was gone by that time! I'm busy today but if no ones fixed it by the time i get back i'll see what i can do. I was going to say "spyware" but thats from the prospective of windows defender. I was also going to say "optional adware" but thats from the prospective of MP!L. I was looking for something neutral.
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Originally posted by CookieRevised
"Messenger Plus! Live builds upon the functionality of Microsoft's Windows Live Messenger adding more functionality."
When i say better, i mean it makes more sense. Read the sentence closely and you'll see why. That sentence basically says this:
"MP!L builds functionality by adding more functionality" - its circulatory and basically says the same thing twice.
Maybe something like this would be better:
"Messenger Plus! Live integrates into Windows Live Messenger's graphical user interface providing users with additional functionality."
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