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so what level is this, personally although i am obviously very unexperienced i beleive this is high B.

Well coursework etc is not necessary marked on your English skills, you should learn that now. It is accessed on the content you have down. Make a good plan of an essay, and take each point individually, then make sure you have answered the essay question

then what do i need to add, change or anything to improve my essay pleeeease!

Well it is a little small. A 1369 word essay is a bit on the small side. You can easily elaborate on more points or go into some research about the play. You will be rewarded marks for extra research, something your classmates won't have . It may also help to give a background of the time, what was the message of the play, why did Shakespeare write it. When I wrote my Macbeth essay I add to mention the history of James I, and why it was based in Scotland etc.

I think you have your hopes way too high for that high B. Shakespeare is hard, and I wrote double that length and only scraped a B out of it.

Also you will get better marks if your work is unique in the some way. May be use a developed writing style. Again I think you are thinking GCSE's are easy. Yes, understanding them is easy, but you need to learn how to get your brain on paper.

This may help:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Romeo_and_Juliet

my teacher said try to do about 700-1000 words. so i allready did quite alot of excess work thanks for the help though will make some adjustments to the essay

A conclusion to sum up the basic points could also help, just to tidy it up. Hint, leave the final sentence on a powerful message, something significant, and if possible your own opinion

kk thanks.

some please write a suitable summary for me, if needs to be handed in tommorow its a peice of my GCSE coursework and i know that is all it is lacking please som1 try to improve my poor summary pleeeease i beg you!!!!!!!! thank youuuuuu

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Originally posted by flanders56
some please write a suitable summary for me, if needs to be handed in tommorow its a peice of my GCSE coursework and i know that is all it is lacking please som1 try to improve my poor summary pleeeease i beg you!!!!!!!! thank youuuuuu

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Tbh, you shouldn't ask us to write/improve it for you, it's YOUR coursework, YOU should be the one to meet the deadline, and YOU should be the one writing it.

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Originally posted by flanders56
some please write a suitable summary for me, if needs to be handed in tommorow its a peice of my GCSE coursework and i know that is all it is lacking please som1 try to improve my poor summary pleeeease i beg you!!!!!!!! thank youuuuuu

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Tbh, you shouldn't ask us to write/improve it for you, it's YOUR coursework, YOU should be the one to meet the deadline, and YOU should be the one writing it.

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I have reached the deadline have a look when this post was made.. i did it about a week before the post... and these people have given me pointers on things to add .. i am merely asking for some to tell me things to add to the summary.. thanks X